(I'm sorry I'm late to comment on this, I've been away and didn't have a chance to read it! Seeing the link in my in box was pure torture for a while there!)
This is just remarkable! I love how you fleshed out the atmosphere of the city. It's so vivid and bleak. And the tweaks you made with the timeline, setting Dean's return much later, and then adding the scenes with Sam, were awesome--not only do we get some comfort from John, but from Sam too? I ain't gonna object to that!
Most interesting though, was how you turned the return to the house around, and instead of Dean being the one to initiate it, and John having to figure out why, it was inverted. That was a really nice surprise, and you really make it work, make me believe John would do this kind of thing, force Dean to deal with the trauma head-on. And what he says to Dean here was just so heartbreaking:
"If what happened last year hadn't broken your heart then you wouldn't be the kind of man I would want to know."
You just nailed it.
Wonderful job! Thanks for taking the fic somewhere I was thrilled to follow!
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Date: 2011-01-09 09:26 pm (UTC)This is just remarkable! I love how you fleshed out the atmosphere of the city. It's so vivid and bleak. And the tweaks you made with the timeline, setting Dean's return much later, and then adding the scenes with Sam, were awesome--not only do we get some comfort from John, but from Sam too? I ain't gonna object to that!
Most interesting though, was how you turned the return to the house around, and instead of Dean being the one to initiate it, and John having to figure out why, it was inverted. That was a really nice surprise, and you really make it work, make me believe John would do this kind of thing, force Dean to deal with the trauma head-on. And what he says to Dean here was just so heartbreaking:
"If what happened last year hadn't broken your heart then you wouldn't be the kind of man I would want to know."
You just nailed it.
Wonderful job! Thanks for taking the fic somewhere I was thrilled to follow!